MONNET, bellatrix, done

BELLATRIX ANNE MONNET

FEMALE : THIRTY THREE : WAITRESS : WEREWOLF

I LIVE MY LIFE LIKE THERE'S NO TOMORROW
AND ALL I'VE GOT, I HAD TO STEAL

Bellatrix is a complexe character. She is not human anymore. She is thirty-three and infected. She is a fighter. She will fight anyone for any reason. She has a tendency of getting angry fast and quick. She then reacts with violence. She has a strong personality and doesn’t that shit from anyone. This tends to get her in trouble. She over reacts a lot and thends to be more of a drama queen. Her favorite person is her ownself. She believes in taking care of herself first and then if there is time others. She loves to party and go crazy. She likes to drink a lot and dance. She sometimes ends up dancing on tables. She loves attention and having the spotlight on her. She is fun to be around and always has something to say. She likes to have long conversation while drinking coffee. She’s also a sensual person. She looks good and knows it. She loves to flirt with boys and girls. She loves to make-out and she is easy to get into bed. This also tends to get her into trouble.

But when it comes to having friends and being there for someone she is. Unless of course it was going against her getting what she wants. If it does then she doesn’t mind to hurt her own best friend if she has to. She knows what she wants and would stop at nothing to get it. She doesn’t mind using her body in order to get what she wants. One of the main thing is power. She loves to be in charge, getting her way. She also loves money but hate to work. She is what people call a gold digger. She simply believes she is smater then most people who slave at work.

Another thing about her past worth mentionning is that her father walked out of her mother when Bellatix was just a baby. Starting then there was a serie of men into her mother’s life. Bellatrix never had a father figure that would stay long enough and most of the men her mother would find were never the best type of men. Bellatrix then started to have a strange outlook on relationship. She says she doesn’t believe in them but of course she would love to be taken care of by someone who would care for her. But until then she still keeps a serie of men.

Bellatrix loved to tease men. It was the reason why she was changed into what she is now. You see Bellatrix loved a challenge. And one night there was one man sitting alone at the bar. She had often seen him. He looked mysterious and dangerous. She decided she was going to have him. At first he didn’t seem to want nothing to do with her which was something that Bella didn’t like. But eventually he gave in and she made him forget about everything, including the fact that it was a full moon. During a heated moment, he turned and bit Bellatrix infecting her. She was freaking out at first but eventually was okay with it.She is not the type of person who feels sorry for herself.She will simply get up and find the best of any situation.

Back then Monnet had a close friend. Who is of course human. Mora is actually a citizen of the sun. Mona and her people believes that Loup-Garoux are monsters. She forced Bellatrix to register and even then she refused to talk to the brunette woman again. Bellatrix felt hurt and betrayed which makes her and angry and bitter wolf. She would ever never register if it had not been because of Mona. Monnet has never forgiven her for this and will eventually find her way to get back to her ex best friend.

LEAST I DON'T NEED TO BEG OR BORROW
YEAH, I'M LIVIN' AT A PACE THAT KILLS
ROSE MCGOWAN : SOF : FEMALE : OLD ENOUGH : PM

You're about 300 words short for the application's minimum word count requirement, and in general we'd like to see more detail going on. It reads as a list of facts without depth and feelings put behind them. We don't just want to know what she does, but why she does it. Flesh her out more, please, and add to the word count, and we'll give it a longer look.

i reworked it but for some reason the coding looks wrong. Do you have any idea why?

Just wanted to let you know I fixed your coding for you, hun. Also not ignoring you, but I'll let Mal check this over, as she was first to get it. <3

I still have to see more depth put into why this character is the way she is, with more feeling and explanation. We're an intermediate-advanced site and so we hold certain standards our applications have to meet before they can be accepted to role-play here, as the application is how we judge who is capable of writing to the board's set standard. One of the things we look for in application is that we're not getting only a list of facts, but that we have feel as if we—and the writer—understand how the character feels, and that the writer can evoke it in depth and make us relate to the character. I'm seeing the skin without understanding what's below it; what makes this character really tick?

We will need to see these sorts of details in your writing not only in the application itself, but feel as if you will do this in your roleplaying as well, before acceptance. I am not intending to be offensive in any way, simply stating how we operate here as our standards are set and understood among those already accepted. And so I have to admit that with this in mind I am not entirely sure this board is a proper fit for your style of writing, as I am not getting this feeling of depth of character understanding yet.

Something else to note is that the character is a fashion designer, and not a waitress as you've stated at the top of the application, which will need to be fixed..

thank you for having fixed the code

Thank you also for giving me a chance to apply and to redo my application. This site does look awesome and i want to wish you best of the luck with it. You might be write and this site might not be right for me. Still thank you for your honesty and kindness

You're welcome and we're sorry it didn't work. Thank you for being understanding, as well. We wish you all the luck in the world wherever else you may roleplay at some day.