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Jeremy Vs Doomsday, Story| Lorelai+Luke=4ever |
Posted: May 31 2009, 07:00 PM
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Doomsday Idenity is Disovered which spells trouble for the Kryptonian Brothers Kal-el & Jer-el, Their will be a death that holds dear to one of the Brothers, The only way to Stop Doomsday is for one of the Brothers to Morph into his ranger Foarm & send doomsday to the phantom zone
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This is The part of the Power Ranger/Smallville/Gilmore Girl Crossover
Their will be a death a character in the chapter Doomsday identity is Reveled & it’s not Davis Bloom in the Universe, It’s Been Two Years since Jeremy & Rory broke up cause Rory started to have feeling for Logan Huntzberger & They Broke up & Rory didn’t want anything to do their Daughter Lorelai Jennifer Sullivan so she gave Custody to Jeremy & turned to dino Morpher to Jeremy & then in return he gave to his Cousin Lois Lane, After They Defeated Mesogog or Jeremy put him into the phantom Zone where he belonged, He took a year off from Fighting evil to deal with his loss of love with Rory, Then he Helped The Mystic Force Ranger & Then The Operation overdrive as the red Ranger, he also meet Rose Ortiz & dated her well still is, But he still in love with Rory. Jeremy Vs Doomsday May 07 Jeremy Super-Sped into the Fortress of solitude “You wanted to speak me“. Jeremy said “Yes my Son, as you remember their’s a drawing in the cave wall in Smallville, about a Creature with two head, do you remember it” Jor-el said “Yes I do, But what does that have to do with anything“. Jeremy said Jor-el showed a hologram of Doomsday “He’s Ugly“. Rose said “Who is he“, Jeremy said “He’s called doomsday, he was Zod’s Creation & Zod sent him to earth about the same time I sent Kal-el to earth, he was created to destroy & adapt to any attack. He always has a human identity.” Jor-el said “Who is he“. Jeremy said Jor-el shows the hologram on who doomsday is “No, Don’t say it Ain’t so”. Jeremy said as he was Shocked “My son, you know him“. Jor-el said “He’s the one that stole Rory away from me, He goes by Logan Huntzberger, but why did he steal Rory“. Jeremy said “He can make any girl, Fall in love with him, That’s why you lost Rory, You have to get her away from the spell that she’s under & get doomsday here, so you can send doomsday to the Phantom Zone where he belongs“. Jor-el said “How do we get her Outta that spell & how do I bring him here, Today’s graduation at Yale“. Jeremy said “My son, you will use the device on Rory to block out to spell, Give this to Rory for when she’s at graduation, she has to hold hands with doomsday, They will be teleported here, while you open the portal to the phantom zone, then it will be the end of doomsday” Jor-el Jeremy took the two devices out of the crystal “So What’s gonna happen to us” Rose said “I Don’t know, It’s all up to Rory if she wants to get back together or she wants to be with other people, Rose you have to understand we had a child together” Jeremy said “I know, But I love Jennifer like she was my own, This year has been amazing, Jeremy I’m pregnant” Rose said “How many weeks” Jeremy said “About a month” Rose said “You are a month & you still fought Flurious , Moltor, Kamdor, Miratrix, Fearcats. I forgot my child is half Kryptonian so it can survive, I will have to think about what I’m gonna do, come on let’s get to stars hollow before they go to graduation & break that spell” Jeremy said Jeremy lifted Rose up & super-sped out ----------------------------------------------------------------------- Stars Hollow Jeremy Super-sped into stars hollow & arrived at Lorelai’s House “So this is where she grew up“. Rose said “Yep“. Jeremy said “So how are you gonna handle this“. Rose said “I’m gonna call Lorelai, I will ask her to come outside, when the door opens you will turn invisible & get a hold of her, then I come in & use the device, Then give her the one to teleport her & Logan to the fortress“. Jeremy said “Well get a calling“. Rose said Jeremy dialed Lorelai’s cell phone “Hello“. Lorelai said “Lorelai, it’s Jeremy, I need you to come outside cause it’s important“. Jeremy said “Alright, Morey I’m on my way over“. Lorelai said “Rory it was Morey, they need help with something, I will be back in a minute“. Lorelai said “Alright“. Rory said Lorelai went outside & didn’t notice Rose go in “What’s so important“. Lorelai said “Logan is From my Planet, He’s also called Doomsday, he also put Rory under a spell“. Jeremy said “So he’s a Evil Alien, Hell bound on killing you or Clark, He’s this big ugly monster & he put a spell on my daughter to fall in love with him, so how do you stop him“. Lorelai said “First, got to get rid of the spell, Rose is invisible as we speak trying to tackle her, so I can use this device on Rory to break the spell, Lorelai Rose is Pregnant with my child, I don’t know what do to cause I don’t know if I’m gonna survive this battle with Doomsday, the chances are 50/50“. Jeremy said “Man you’ve had a bad two years, what’s that noise“. Lorelai said “Rose, got a hold of Rory“. Jeremy said They went inside “Hey I got a hold of her“. Rose said “I knew you were behind this, you just can’t be happy for me can you. Stupid alien bastard“. Rory said Jeremy used the device on Rory, she went back to normal “Jeremy, what the hell. Who is she“. Rory said “Rory, what do you remember“. Jeremy said “Logan Kidnapping for that stupid Club, then it went all blank, why, please tell who she is“. Rory said “Rory, It’s may 0f 2007, your graduating today, you were put under a spell by Logan, he’s from my planet & he’s called Doomsday & he was sent to Destroy me, You broke up with me after the event & gave me custody of Jennifer & Gave me your Morpher & I left Town for awhile to stop mesogog, Then took a year off cause nothing was going on, then went to help out the mystic force rangers, Then I was selected to help Andrew Hartford & I became the Red Overdrive Ranger, where I met Rose & well we are dating cause well you dumped me“. Jeremy said “Two years I’ve been under a spell by a evil alien who wants to kill you, I’m so sorry, please forgive, I didn’t mean any of it, oh my god, Logan proposed didn’t he, I remember, I don’t want him, I want you“. Rory said “I know, But I need you to pretend to still be under his spell, so you can use this device to send him to the fortress, so I can send him to the Phantom Zone for good, can you do it. Then after we can talk about us“. Jeremy said “Of Course I can do it, So how’s Jennifer & where is she“. Rory said “She’s a happy 3 yr old, I left her with my parents, Rory I want you to meet Rose“. Jeremy said “Hi“. Rory said “Hi“. Rose said “You get to know each other, I’m going to the Fortress to wait for you, Rose you stay here until further notice“. Jeremy “Alright“. Rose said Jeremy super-sped to the power Chamber to get the Black Kryptonite Cannon to spilt Doomsday & Logan, if he’s right, Rory really does love Logan with or Without a spell --------------------------------------------------------------------- The Fortress Of Solitude Jeremy was waiting with the Cannon when someone showed up “So your Gonna Separate, Doomsday & This Logan person, They are the same you know, I hope you know what you are doing“. Jon Jones said “I know what I’m doing, I’m gonna separate the two, Cause Logan needs to go to Prison for killing those people, you’ve heard right“. Jeremy said “Yes I did, I heard that his family just died this morning, Doomsday is getting stronger, It may be hard to send him to the Phantom Zone“. Jon said “I have it all covered, I’ll morph into the Gold Mystic force ranger, Use a little spell & kick his boney butt to the Phantom zone, He’s from Krypton so magic will hurt him, I should know.” Jeremy said “I will stick around for help“. Jon said “Sure“. Jeremy said ---------------------------------------------------------- After Graduation Rory’s POV “It was After Graduation, Rory had a Job to do, Pretend to still love Logan & still pretend to be under his spell & then say yes to his proposal & then use the disk to send Doomsday to Jeremy’s Fortress & then to some place call the phantom Zone, But she was still reeling from something that Jeremy’s Current Girlfriend Rosalina Ortiz told her, That she’s pregnant with Jeremy’s Kid, Come on now, Hasn’t life screwed her enough, First She meets Logan aka Doomsday & then everything does blank for 2 years & she finds out that she dumped her Fiancé & gave custody of their 8 month old to him cause Logan made her, He leaves town cause he can’t be around her & she also turns her Morpher over & he gives it to Lois Lane of all People & they Defeat Mesogog, What couldn’t he Figure out sooner that Logan was a Killing Machine from his dead Planet, Sure he got the info from Jor-el 2 yrs to late, But come one he has X-ray Vision couldn’t he have seen or was he to Blinded by anger he couldn’t see, But I don’t blame him for leaving town, The damn town put ribbons up, All of them were in favor of Jeremy cause he was the victim & to this day they are still up taking sides, I don’t blame them, I was Worse then Mesogog, I was the Villain & just didn’t see it, Will He Return to Stars Hollow once this whole Doomsday thing is over, Or will be go with Rose to marry old England to raise his & Rosalina Kid & Jennifer, God she hopes not, She Missed Jennifer’s 1st, 2nd & 3rd birthday, By now Jennifer probably learned to Talk & walk, he Probably told her what a horrible person I am, Hell she is getting her memory’s back from what happened & remembers getting a visit from Future Jennifer, Telling & cussing her out for what she did, She also didn’t Blame year 3000 Jen for being a bitch, She’s from the future why didn’t she know, she’s from the Future, But of Course it’s wasn’t set in motion, things change, Rory Knows she Screwed up, She’s also worried that either she or Jeremy’s gonna die in the hands of Doomsday, Her money is one her, Once he sees what’s gonna go down, She never Loved Logan cause well he’s a monster, She loves Jeremy cause he’s a hero, He’s defeated every monster from Mesogog, The Master to the evil brother Fire & ice, Fear cats, a ninja & his lady friend, he will forever he that hero that she dated & was engaged to, She throw it all away cause she was under a spell, Boy now I know how my mother felt when she was a ranger, Rory now knows she fucked it real bad, She knows this is the day that either she’s gonna die or Jeremy in the hands of Doomsday, Oh God here he comes, Just play it cool & pretend to be under his spell“. End of Rory’s POV “Hey Ace“. Logan said “Hey, Stud Muffin“. Rory said “Oh god I think I’m gonna be sick” “Remember that proposal I did a few nights ago“. Logan said “Yes“. Rory said “Lorelai you better pray, That she doesn’t say yes, Cause he’s not good for her, Jeremy was far suited, No Thanks to Logan, You haven’t seen your Granddaughter in 2 yrs since he moved to California & moved in with Ashley“. Emily said “Don’t worry, She’s gonna say no, Logan is really a evil creature called Doomsday. Sent here to Kill either Jeremy or Clark, Plus she was under a spell from Loomsday, Jeremy was here this morning to break it, Jennifer is with Laura & Gab, Jeremy gave Rory a disk to send Him to Jeremy’s Fortress & to send Doomsday to the phantom Zone, Trust me mom, Jeremy & Rory will make up. Taylor Will take down the Blue Ribbons & everything will be hopefully back to normal, Well expect for the fact he got his team mate Rose Preggers“. Lorelai said “So What’s he going to do“. Emily said “I don’t know mom, I really don’t know“. Lorelai said “You two, Be quiet, I wanna hear what the prick has to say“. Luke said “So Ace Will you marry me“. Logan said “Yes“. Rory said Rory Grabs a hold of Logan’s Hand & then they Disappear in a flash of Light “Where did they go“. Emily said “It was all the master Plan, Rory uses the disk, They go the Fortress, Bing, Bang Boom, Our lives will be like it was before Logan Messed with our Lives“. Lorelai said Then a Officer came up to them “Excuse me, I’m Looking for Logan Huntzberger, Has anyone seen him“. Officer Gentry said “What’s going on, Young Man“. Richard said “Logan Huntzberger has been charged with the killing of His Parents, Grandparents, His Sister & her Husband, his friends, We are afraid a Rory Danes will be his next victim, so has anyone seen him“. Officer Gentry said “Well, As we were coming to warn her, cause well we learned that he was a danger, They disappeared in a flash of light, Who Knows where they went“. Lorelai said “A Flash of Light, What are you saying“. Officer gentry said “How were they killed“. Emily said “Ma’ am They had their guts pulled out, We have tapes to show he went from being a human to a Giant Boney Beast, Then he ripped their guts out & left them for dead“. Officer gentry said “Oh my“. Emily said “So where do you think they went“. Officer Gentry said “We Don’t know, My Poor Rory is in danger“. Lorelai said “We will have put out a nation man hunt, Hopefully she isn’t dead, I would like you folks to go home & wait word, I will come by tonight, if we have any info, Thank you for your time“. Officer Gentry said “Ok, Let’s head back to the House & wait for Jeremy to do his Job & send Him to This Phantom Zone“. Luke said ---------------------------------------------------------- The Fortress In a Flash of Light Doomsday & Rory where in the Fortress “Where are we, Ace you tricked me, that makes me angry“. Logan said Logan eyes turned red & he began to Transform but Jeremy Came out of the Shadows with the Cannon “Rory Get Down“. Jeremy Yelled Rory Bent down & Fired the Cannon at Doomsday, Separating the two & Rory got up but it was Too late Doomsday & Logan were Separated but as Rory got up, Doomsday took a swing at Rory & She Flew & Hit a Pile of Ice Crystal’s, Doomsday Roared with anger “Rory, You Murder’s Bastard you will pay. Jon go Check on Rory“. Jeremy said “Alright“. Jon said “Must Destroy Kryptonian“. Doomsday said “You want a Fight you got it“. Jeremy said Doomsday & Jeremy Started to fight, But Doomsday was getting the upper hand & Tossed Jeremy Like a rag doll “Jon Open the Portal now” Jeremy said Then Jon went over to the Crystal & Found the Phantom Zone one & opened the Portal “You are going where you belong & can’t harm anyone“. Jeremy said “Must Destroy Kryptonian“. Doomsday said “Oh shut up, Magical Source, Mystic Force“. Jeremy said Jeremy Transformed into the Gold Mystic Force Ranger “Mystic Force, Gold Ranger“. Jeremy said “Must Destroy Kryptonian“. Doomsday said “It don’t think so, Code 545, Boxing Glove Mode“. Jeremy said The Gloves Appeared around Jeremy Hands & he started to punch Doomsday& Jeremy was getting the upper hand, He did one final Blow & he knocked Doomsday into the Phantom Zone & then Jon Pulled out the Crystal out & Fell to his knees & Powered Down “So It’s All Over“. Jeremy said “Yes. But at a Cost“. Jon said “What Cost“. Jeremy said “Rory is Badly Hurt“. Jon said “No, I can take her to the hospital“. Jeremy said “It will be late, she is badly hurt, May die anytime now“. Jon said “No“. Jeremy said Jeremy ran over to Rory “Rory, Please Don’t die on me, Please, I Love her to much to lose you“. Jeremy said “Jeremy, Please Promise me one thing, Before I die“. Rory said “No your not gonna die, But what is it“. Jeremy said “Please Can’t Care of Jennifer, Like you been doing, also take care of Rose & your new Baby, Promise me“. Rory said as she Coughed “Yes, I promise you, But don’t leave me“. Jeremy said “Um, Jeremy you better get the Ex-Doomsday before he gets away“. Jon said Jeremy super-sped over to Logan “Where do you think your going, Cause look what your Demon half did to my Girlfriend, Did you even love her“. Jeremy said with anger “No I didn’t it was Doomsday that was, I was Leaving to go the Police, Cause it Killed my parents & everyone else in my life, Just take me to the police please“. Logan said Jeremy Morphed into the Gold Ranger “Jon. I’m taking the pile of crap to the Hartford Police Department, Look after Rory please“. Jeremy said “Sure“. Jon said Jeremy super-sped out of the Fortress with Logan “Jor-el is their anyway to save Rory“. Jon said “There is, We can freeze her & hope in time, That Recovers cause when Doomsday tossed Jer-el around some of his Blood got onto ms. Danes, So there is a chance will she recover, But it will take time, Once she’s in the Stats Field, I will Clone her, Jer-el will take Rory’s Clone Body back to her family, In time she should heal & become a Kryptonian like Jer-el & they will live happy, But Jon do not say anything to Jer-el only to Kal-el since he will begin his training soon, Now put her in the ice Crystal & I will freeze her & Clone her.” Jor-el said Jon did what Jor-el told him to do, He put Rory in the Ice Field & it Froze her & then Jor-el made a Clone & Jon Put Rory back where she was ---------------------------------------------------------------------- The Police Station in Hartford Jeremy Walked into the Police Department as the Gold Rangers with Logan “Officers I believe this the man you are looking for” Gold Ranger said “Yes he is, Mr. Ranger sir, Where did you find him” Officer Harp said “He was Transported to a Ice Fortress up north, Where I used a Device to Separate, Him & The Beast & I sent the beast to a prison where he can’t escape sir” Gold Ranger Said “Um. What happened to Rory Danes, Wasn’t she Transported their also” Officer Gentry said “Yes she was, But the Beast Killed her, Cause I couldn’t get to her in time, Cause I was Battling the Beast, I’m sorry I tried my best, but I’m only one Ranger” Gold Ranger said “So Where is Ms. Danes Body.” Captain Aldean Said “She’s Still in the Ice Fortress, I’m gonna go get her & Take her back to her Parents & let them go from their.” Gold Ranger said “Um Yes, We Will Send Officer Gentry & Harp to tell them, I Just wanna Say Mr. Ranger, That you are doing a wonderful Job In Protecting the Earth” Captain Aldean said “I Know Sir, But I feel like I Failed Her, I didn’t save her in time” Gold Ranger said “You did your best.” Captain Aldean said The Gold Ranger Super-Sped out to the Fortress Of Solitude “Now for you, It’s Time to put you in a Nice Cell, You Murder” Officer McEntire Said ------------------------------------------------------------------- The Fortress of Solitude Jeremy Super-Sped Into The Fortress & Clark His Kryptonian Brother Was their “I Heard what Happened, You know you could have Called me for, That’s what Brothers are for.” Clark said “I’ve been just doing just fine without anyone’s help for two years bro, So do me a favor and back off & Get Outta my way, so I can get Rory’s Body back to Stars Hollow, so I can hear that’s it’s all my fault for not saving Rory in Time, By the all Great Emily Gilmore, She’s Probably Blamed me for the whole 2 years for walking out & not fighting for Rory, So do me a favor & get Outta my Way.” Jeremy said “No, You listen to me, It wasn’t your fault that Doomsday fooled you & had Rory Dump you & you had to take care of your little Girl & fight whatever Evil that was in the World, you did what you had to do, so don’t let Emily Gilmore Push you around.” Clark said “What the hell do you know, You haven’t lost somebody you Loved or Cared about, You still have your Mommy & Daddy around, I’ve lost Respect from everybody in Stars Hollow, I know once I get back their, The Town is gonna blame me for Every bad thing that Happened & I will be chased out of their, Cause I’m sure they took Rory’s Side in the whole Break up, So get your hand off me, before I do something I will regret” Jeremy said “Like what” Clark said Jeremy Then Punched Clark so hard, That Clark flew into a Wall “Do Me a Favor Clark, Stay the Hell Outta of Life & Stop Butting in, Where it’s None of your Business, Do us all a favor & go through your damn Training & become the hero that you are Suppose to & stop being the half ass cry baby that you are” Jeremy said “That’s why I’m here, to begin my Training, Cause because you Lost her, Doesn’t Mean you have to Turn your back on people that care about you” Clark said “Please, Save the noble Hero For Someone who cares, Once they Furnual for her, I’m Taking Jennifer & Leaving Stars Hollow & Moving to London with Rose & I will never look back on those Townies who will blame me & I will start new, in a couple of years don’t come a looking for me, Cause I’m done with those people in Stars Hollow.” Jeremy said Jeremy Picked up Rory & Super-Sped Out “Jor-el do you think he means what he said” Clark said “No my Son, He Doesn’t mean it, He’s Just Hurt & Confused, If I’m right he will stay in Stars Hollow with Rose & have the Child, But I don’t Think it will Last between them cause his heart belongs with Rory, That’s why she’s frozen here, for his sake, Now Son are you ready to begin your Training.” Jor-el said “Yes Father I am” Clark said Then it begin -------------------------------------------------------------- Stars Hollow Jeremy Super-Sped Into Stars Hollow & Arrived at Lorelai’s house & as soon as he got up the stairs Lorelai & the rest of them came up “My Poor Baby, Why did Doomsday have to do this to you.” Lorelai said “I’m sorry I didn’t get to her in Time, You came Blame me if you want, Since I couldn’t get to her in time, I’m so Sorry.” Jeremy said “Jeremy Sweetie, It’s Not Your Fault, You Couldn’t do two things at once, you had to open the Portal to the Phantom Zone, we got the call from the Police Station telling us The Gold Ranger Dropped off Logan, If he’s the Beast how can he stay their.” Lorelai said “I used The Black Kryptonite Cannon that I Built to Separate Elsa & Kimberly, That’s how Logan is in Jail & Doomsday is in the Phantom Zone, I could have been Faster, I can run faster then a Speeding Bullet, but I just couldn’t save her, I bet the whole Town is Blaming me for Leaving, I’m sure Luke, Your Parents, for leaving town” Jeremy said “No, we don’t Blame you for Leaving, We Blame Logan for it, He was Trouble, But Rory was so Blinded by the Spell she Couldn’t see the evil in him.” Emily said “My Boy, What Emily says is True, we don’t Blame you for Leaving or not saving her in time, All it Matters is your back for good, so you can raise your daughter better.” Richard said “You Did Your Best, to save my Daughter, The Town Doesn’t Blame you for Leaving Either, The Town as Crazy as it is, Thought you did the Right Thing, They Put all the Blame on Rory, They even put Blue Ribbons & to this day are taking your Side, cause well they miss you & Jennifer, Plus whenever one of those Tyrannodrones The Town, Lorelai had to Morph to fight them, Cause Rory Didn’t give a Crap.” Luke said Then a Little Girl came out of the house with Rose “Daddy, you back, What Happen to Mommy” Jennifer said “She, Um got Hurt, By a Monster & got hurt” Jeremy said “No, She Got Killed By the Mean Monster, Didn’t She” Jennifer said “Yes she Did, You know your to smart For a 3 year old” Jeremy said “Well Duh, Daddy, I’m Half Kryptonian, Plus Rosie Teaches me” Jennifer said “um, Jeremy, I decided to stay here in Stars Hollow, to Raise The Baby, cause London is to far away. Jennifer Needs to be around Family, The Little Time I spent with them, I feel in love with them & the Town, I could get a teachers Job here.” Rose said “Sure, we can stay” Jeremy said ------------------------------------------------------------------------- A week later Rory’s Fuanal Everybody from The Town to Lorelai’s Brother to Former Teammates to Rory’s Sister & Friends Tommy Oliver, Kimberly Oliver, Kira Oliver, Conner McKnight, Ethan James, Cassidy Oliver, Paris Geller, Chole Sullivan, Doyle her former Editor, Ashley Danes, Lois Lane all came to pay their Respects to Rory. We are Gathered here today to Pay our Respects to Our Beloved Lorelai Leigh Danes Known as Rory, who Died in the Hands of a Evil Creature Known as Doomsday, who was Sent to Earth to Destroy her Ex Fiancé Jeremy, She Couldn’t get Outta of the way Fast Enough from Doomsday before he Killed her, What Can you say about Rory Danes, She was Smart & Bright, She was Loved by her Parents to this very town, it came to a surprise when she Dumped her Boyfriend Jeremy & gave Custody of their daughter Lorelai Jennifer Sullivan to Jeremy, we as a town all Blamed Her & Took Jeremy’s Side, Cause he Didn’t know she was under a Spell, We also didn’t see Jeremy for 2 yrs cause of this, but now with the Death of Rory Danes, He gonna stay & Live here so he can raise his Daughter, Like Rory was Raised in our Town, Hopefully Jennifer can be like her Mother, So as we leave you today we have a few snapshots of Rory’s Life.” Revered Skinner said The Slid show came & went, As Everyone Left, Jeremy stayed & watched them Lower the Casket & he Grabbed a Hand Full of dirt & poured on Rory Casket, Everyone watched him with Sad Looks on their Eyes, But what they didn’t know was that she was a Clone & the Real Rory is Frozen inside the Fortress to Heal, In about 12 years she will hopefully be healed The Be Continued Next Story: Time Heals All Takes Place 2 years after this story. So it will be May 09 Jennifer will be 5 Rose baby let’s call her June will be 1 yr old |
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Posted: Jun 2 2009, 12:15 PM
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Hey this is jory-brucas101 (fanfiction.net)
this is pretty confusing... |
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Posted: Jun 2 2009, 12:45 PM
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Wow! Very intersting. There is a lot of going on. You may want to look at this again there are a lot of gramatical errors that make this really distracting. And it's a bit confusing. I guess that can happen with multple cross overs. So is this a sequel, I feel like I was coming in the middle and am missing something. The idea is very intersting you have a lot of cool ideas going on like Rory being under a spell of Doomsday. And is this Jermey guy Clark's biological brother?
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