Captain America Film, My version of what it would b like

Well, I haven´t finished it yet, so I´m posting what I have written and once I have the rest, I´ll post it. I´m afraid I don´t have the ability Aggamotto has for telling stories as scripts, so I´m telling it in prose, if that´s ok. I think of it as bein visually similar to "Saving Private Ryan". I hope you like it.



Sorry if it has a lot of gramatical or somethinglikethat mistakes, but I was more interested in writin the ideas rather than making em look good.

I know the story might be a bit hard for being based in a superhero comic book, but my main aim was makin it closer to a war film than to a superhero film. I think this film should be R rated, maybe

This post has been edited by franshux on Jun 6 2008, 09:41 PM

The film would actually begin during WW1 (around January 1917). Joseph Rogers, Steve Rogers´ father, leaves the house, dressed as a soldier, for fighting in the war. He leaves his wife Sarah alone, after kissing her. She’s crying as she watches him leave (She’s supposed to be in the second month of pregnancy by this moment).
Then we move to 1941. Brief explanation of what’s going on (Operation: Rebirth and all that stuff) by Dr. Erskine AKA Josef Reinstein, and then we are shown 24 year-old Steve Rogers being injected with the super soldier formula and exposed to the Vita-rays. This scene has to be elaborated, but I guess that there’ll be something like in the comics, that there is a Nazi spy among the people watching and he starts shooting. Although Steve bravely knocks him down, even though he could get shot, Dr. Erskine is killed. Steve kneels by his side as he dies and here we have some flashbacks showing Steve when he was a kid, playing with other kids and showing how much he wanted to serve his nation. Then we move to some years ago, when he wants to enlist for the army and gets rejected. We see how Erskine believes in him and asks him whether he wants to take part in Operation: Rebirth. Back in “present”, the Nazi spy is arrested and Erskine’s corpse is taken away. We overhear a conversation between US agents saying that now Erskine’s gone, the super-soldier’s formula is lost forever, as he was the only one who knew it.
Steve goes back to his home, and here we learn that his father died during WW1 and Sarah raised him on her own. When Steve finally tells her what he plans to do (going to war) his mother cries and implores him not to. He insists, though, and says he’ll go anyway, whether she likes it or not.
The day before he leaves for war, there is a huge press conference in which Steve meets the Secretary of war, Henry L. Stimson , who gives him the Captain America costume. Steve’s mother, who is among the audience, looks disappointed when Steve accepts it, and then she leaves. Steve sees this and the expression in his face changes from extreme happiness and excitement to great sadness.
Then we move to inside a ship, where Cap is sitting among other soldiers. He looks uncomfortable, dressed the way he does, and everyone is looking at him, some with respect and others almost laughing. There’s a slow, short panning of the other men there, as Steve looks at them. Here’s a cameo of Jack Fury, Nick Fury’s father (yeah, I know Nick himself is supposed to be in this war, but as he appears in Iron Man as well... well, it would be impossible that he lived for so long and never aging, right? And I don’t think there would be time in other films to explain all the Infinity Formula stuff, so let’s keep it simple).

Some weeks later, he finally arrives to firm land, and meets some of the men that are part of his division. Well, here basically the most important thing is that he befriends his superior (let’s call him Major K, as I haven’t thought of a name yet) and knows a soldier (let’s call him J) who tells him that “no matter how good you are nor how hard you try to help it, you end up becoming an animal here. It’s always been that way, and no one is an exception.” Here we see some of the first fights of Cap, which are not very spectacular (by now...). Steve learns that the main objective of his division is to arrive to Germany unexpectedly, and once there start attacking via guerrilla warfare methods. He’s told of the Red Skull, as well, a sadistic German “super-soldier”, trained in almost every known martial art, excellent when having to use guns, etc. and Hitler’s greatest soldier. He is told that it was planned, from the very beginning, that HE fought him once they arrive in Germany.
Meanwhile, we move to Germany and the Red Skull is introduced. Even though Cap’s arrival is supposed to be a secret, he has learnt of it, so he plans on ambushing him and his division once they get closer to Germany. (all through the movie, there should be scenes showing him a bit... so that people don’t forget he’s the main villain, you know)
Cap befriends other soldiers as they move towards Germany, but his relationship with J is still a bit tense. During these scenes there’s time for showing a bit of the WW2 panorama and all that stuff.
Finally (weeks/months later), they arrive to Germany, and they are attacked unexpectedly by Axis soldiers. Many are killed, but still they manage to defeat their opponents, who have no other option but leaving the place. Before they return with more men, the American soldiers find a place where to hide. An abandoned building proves perfect for this. Steve is informed that his mother is terribly ill, and will possibly die soon. He wants to go back to the US and see her, but he’s not allowed to by his superiors, who are very sorry about it but insist that the plan must go on. Cap is now much darker and less nice. He has nightmares about her mother blaming him for her death, and nightmares involving his deceased father as well. Steve Rogers starts to crumble, and little is left of him. He slowly starts employing more instinctive and animal-like methods during battles, proving what J had predicted... in fact, during a battle involving two or three tanks, he kills everyone in them mercilessly (yeah, I know this is a little shocking, considering we’re talking about Cap, but what I want to show is that behind the symbol there’s a man who is as emotionally and psychologically fragile as all of us. However, it will be later on in the film that we are shown why he’s Captain America: not because he HASN’T fallen to the deepest and scariest parts of himself... but because he was able to come back from them and never fall again).
The victories of the group of soldiers are amazing, and they become famous both in the Allied and Axis fronts. Red Skull realises things can’t continue like that, sending more and more troops and being defeated every time, so he decides to personally meet the American division and agreeing in doing an armistice. As he doesn’t know where they’re hidden, he makes sure that they learn about this and meet him in a certain place. The meeting finally happens, in a street not far from the building where the soldiers where hidden. The Red Skull asks Major K to go with him to a better place, where they can talk about it. K doesn’t trust him, so The RS tells him he can take his best soldier with him if he wants to. K obviously picks Cap to go with him, and J feels terribly jealous of him.
They go to a very nice building, one of the few that remained almost untouched. They are invited to have some tea (!) and sit, and Red Skull tells them that, even though their latest victories were certainly amazing, they would not be able to resist for much longer. They were just a few men against all the soldiers in Germany. So he proposes letting them leave if they give him the secret of the Super-Soldier formula. Major K refuses, and when he and Cap are leaving, they are double-crossed and shot from behind. K is killed, and Cap is shot in his arm. He manages to steal a jeep or something like that, and drives towards the countryside (or whatever). Unfortunately, a bomb falls nearby, and the explosion fatally wounds him and knocks him down. Believing he must have been destroyed in the explosion, RS and his soldiers stop looking for him, much to R.S.´s anger, who wanted to get his body and this way discover the secret of the Super-Soldier formula.
Towards the night, Cap is thrown to a hole, among other corpses, believed dead (besides, both due to the darkness and the fact that his costume is partly ripped off and very dirty, the men who throw him there don’t realise who he actually is). Later, a 15/16-year-old kid starts looking for something he can find useful among the corpses. Then, a soldier comes out from nowhere and wants to rape him or something like that. Fortunately, Cap wakes up and kills the man by hitting him in the neck with his shield. Then, he faints. The kid realises who he is, and takes him to his home (which actually is a semi-destroyed building). His mother is reluctant of accepting the man in their house at first, as they are hiding from the Nazi troops, and having Captain America in there would catch a lot of attention. Finally, however, she accepts.
Steve lays in bed, with fever, for weeks. The woman doesn’t understand how he isn’t dead yet, considering how grave his wounds are. But still he gets over and befriends the woman and the child. The child is called James Buchanan Barnes. His father, an English Jewish professor, died at the beginning of the War (he was taken to a concentration camp and murdered). The woman is German (I’ve got to think of a name... let’s call her Maria for the moment) and that’s why James can speak both German and English fluently. Since the death of her husband, they had to go into hiding, fearing that they might be hunted down, taken to a concentration camp and murdered.
Steve and Maria fall in love, and Steve starts feeling better again (psychologically, I mean). His friendship with James is stronger as well and, once Steve has got better, they both leave the house in seek of food and all that. Here we see that James is a really skilled hand-to-hand combatant and is pretty good with guns as well.
Eventually Maria repairs Cap’s costume (using the leather of some old shoes, so the costume now looks much more rustic and “home-made”), and Steve goes back to the place where his division was hiding. He learns that many have been murdered in an ambush and only a few have survived. He tells them to go with him to Maria’s house, and they do. She is truly angry at him for this, of course, and that strains their relationship.
Not much later, however, they are attacked by the Red Skull and many Nazi soldiers. J has revealed them where Cap was hiding and, in return, he expects to earn the respect and honour he didn’t have in the American troops (for Cap America overshadowed him, from his point of view). All the soldiers are killed (I mean, the American ones... the ones that were INSIDE the building). Maria, desperate, runs out of the building, asking them to stop, that there was a child inside. Steve and James run after her, asking her not to go outside... but it’s too late. The Red Skull easily realises what Cap feels for her, and shoots her and James in front of him. She dies, and James is mortally wounded. Cap is wounded as well, but not very much. In a sudden outburst of rage, he kills almost all the soldiers who were with RS, who manages to escape in a car, though. Cap swears revenge, and cries for the loss of Maria. Then he takes James to a hospital and gives him a transfusion of his own blood, hoping that gives James the super-regenerative abilities he has.

i like, fran. Mind if i leave a few points?

1.) Maybe in the first scene with Steve's parents, it should be silent. I think that would be emotionally impacting, and it would still get the point across, as we see the man in the army uniform leaving and the woman tearing up. Also, maybe we should never actually see Joseph's face. I don't know why, but i just think it would be cool if when he turns back to say goodbye to his wife on last time, the sun is right behind his head, so we don't see his face. Then, when he is gone, the woman puts her hand on her stomach, to show that she is pregnant, even though we wouldn't be able to notice it.

2.)I think it would also be kind of cool if the whole first movie takes place in world War two, but if that isn't what you have planed, then i totally understand. Also, If you did really want to use Nick Fury, this wouldn't necessarily have to be connected to Iron Man, would it?

1) absolutely agree. I was thinkin of a scene similar to the one in "Savin private Ryan" when Ryan´s mother is informed of the death of his sons... somethin similar to that, u know.
2) Yeah, I want the film to be aaaaaalllll durin WW2, but I wanted to put in a cameo or two, lol. I mentioned Iron Man cuz of the time... it would b weird if in IM Nick appears as a 50 something-old man and in the cap film he appears as a soldier as well. If so, he should be like 100 years by the time IM occurs, so I thought "let´s use his father instead". Anyways, It was just a weird idea I had when i started writin it.

and thanks for the comments comixkid, they are really appreciated!

This post has been edited by franshux on Jun 6 2008, 09:46 PM

As u can see, Bucky appears without costume, and just like a regular teenager (well, a "regular" teenager who is an excellent hand-to-hand combatant, has great acrobatic skills...). I did this cuz I didn´t like him bein so similar to Robin (I find that kinda sidekicks pathetic). But I still wanted him to be in the film, mainly cuz of all what happens to him later in his life (bein the Winter soldier, eventually replacing Cap, etc), so I intoduced him differently, and put some of the first elements for him becomin the Winter Soldier (what do u think the blood transfusion is for? hahaha)

This is a brilliant set of ideas Franshux, im not a captain America fan at all, so it takes a really good story to get me hooked and here we have it. As it stands so far, we have a treatment for a Captain America film id love to see.

I'd be happy to write it up in screenplay format for you. You've basically given us a detailed scene over view so it would be just a case of you telling me what to write.

Still, awesome ideas though

Oh, man thanks a lot!! I wasn´t pretty sure whether ppl would like this Cap America treatment... you know, specially the american audience might not like it very much. But it seems that you´ve liked it so far, so when I have time I´m completing it n postin it.






It´d be really cool if u could write it as a script aggamotto! Of course, it´s not a must or stg. like that. Write it if you want, and if u have time and all that. I have some ideas for ecrtain scenes though, like the one in which James is takin Cap to his home. I didn´t explain it very much cuz I don´t have enough english vocabulary for describin it very well, so I´ll try to draw a quick sketch some day so as to give u an idea.



Well, thanks for ur comments!! Feedback is really appreciated!!

Aggie, I still have to read your Green Lantern script. GL is a character that I think truly deserves it, so I´m really interested in readin it.

Oh, man thanks a lot!! I wasn´t pretty sure whether ppl would like this Cap America treatment... you know, specially the american audience might not like it very much. But it seems that you´ve liked it so far, so when I have time I´m completing it n postin it.






It´d be really cool if u could write it as a script aggamotto! Of course, it´s not a must or stg. like that. Write it if you want, and if u have time and all that. I have some ideas for ecrtain scenes though, like the one in which James is takin Cap to his home. I didn´t explain it very much cuz I don´t have enough english vocabulary for describin it very well, so I´ll try to draw a quick sketch some day so as to give u an idea.



Well, thanks for ur comments!! Feedback is really appreciated!!

It's no problem at all, it's nice to se someones takign a serious approach to the film. If you drop me a Pm detailing the scene or if you can include a quick storyboard then i can get on it for you

Oh, man thanks a lot!! I wasn´t pretty sure whether ppl would like this Cap America treatment... you know, specially the american audience might not like it very much. But it seems that you´ve liked it so far, so when I have time I´m completing it n postin it.






It´d be really cool if u could write it as a script aggamotto! Of course, it´s not a must or stg. like that. Write it if you want, and if u have time and all that. I have some ideas for ecrtain scenes though, like the one in which James is takin Cap to his home. I didn´t explain it very much cuz I don´t have enough english vocabulary for describin it very well, so I´ll try to draw a quick sketch some day so as to give u an idea.



Well, thanks for ur comments!! Feedback is really appreciated!!

It's no problem at all, it's nice to se someones takign a serious approach to the film. If you drop me a Pm detailing the scene or if you can include a quick storyboard then i can get on it for you

Yeah, that´d be awesome!! I´ll do a fast sketch/storyboard of the first scene so u can get an idea

I look forward to it