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(Fara)



Age:3

Starting age:1

Gender:Female

Level:28

Alliance:Padaran, pack-dwelling

Rank:

Lineage:Charmeleon

Types:

Abilities:Blaze

Special Powers:Fire breather

Attacks:
--Ember
--Smoke Screen
--Dragon Rage
--Scary Face
--Fire Fang
--Slash
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Starshard Attacks:
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Appearance:
Fara's appearance can be considered normal, but a bit awkward at the same time. She stands at about 3'7", which is a average height for a Charmeleon such as herself. She is also a bit muscular, but it does not show much. Her arms are of course long, and her legs short, fitting perfectly with her body and it's basic movement needs. Fara is not really considered thin, due to her under belly sticking out a bit, which is normal in her breed. But she is not exactly considered chubby ether, just to add. Having the basic looks of a lizard, she does posses most of the species traits. The fire lizard has small individual scales, it is very difficult to tell them apart if you don't look very closely. The crimson scales are a bit rough at touch, and even on the smooth side if you run your hand down them. Fara's hands are reinforced with three individual claws placed on the good sized paws. The claws are very sharp, not at all dulled in anyway. The are a white color, she always makes sure to wash them properly to keep them that way.

Fara's face is not that long, it can be considered a muzzle almost, but it may a bit to short. Her nostrils are located at the sides of her nose, they are nothing more then thin slits, but still as sensitive as ever. Her feet also have claws of their own, giving her a advantage when kicking at a enemy if she is ever forced to.Her eye shape is almost like a triangle pulled to the side, but very blunt at the point. Fara's pupils are round of course, and are a deep green color. Her skull, like any other Charmeleon's, has the shape of something horn-like at the back of her head, a well known trait. Her scales are a deep red, with a almost blood like shade to it. Her underbelly is a creamy color, going from her chest, to her under her tail. Fara's tail is a bit long, but fitting just as well. A very bright flame resides on the tip, flickering constantly, and glowing with a mix of yellow and red colors.

Personality:
Fara has a somewhat mixed personality. You can really never get a hold of how she truly acts, but there is some personalty that show out more then others. To start of, Fara knows how to keep out of everything and anyone's business. She absolutely hates drama, she mostly cares about action, something she favors most of all. Her desires show easily, she usually tells anyone bluntly, not caring for a answer or not. Fara quest is the become stronger then she is, something that many Pokemon usually go after. She also seeks to become smarter, not to be completely reckless, and to jump into things without a plan. She can be seen as emotionless at times, often known to act regular even in the most frantic situations.

Fara usually is up front with things, telling someone if they have a dislike, or have a suggestion she think may be useful. She is not at all shy, sometimes showing up at unsuspected moments. Arguments is something she is use to having, and something she had a fond for. Fara knows, and loves, facts. She is not really for hopes or dreams. She goes by what could most likely happen, and what is possible to achieve. Anything else is not a option for her. Fara is able to get easily angered and agitated, not minding having a little tussle. She has a hard time focusing though, her mind is usually filled with a mass amount of thoughts. So she can be stressed out at times. She often ignores her feelings she has, and relies on instincts. And if she scenes something is wrong, she often concludes something is wrong.

History:
Fara was born in the mountains, at a common nesting site. This place was a traditional place where Charizard or other species of mountain Pokemon go there to have their young. So she was able to socialize with many other types of Pokemon. Fara's father said she was born with a fighting spirit, by the way she always play fought with the other small Charmander. She was hardly known to give up with set on doing something, it could be anything, and she would try, try again. Her brother was someone she rarely socialized with. He was to soft, to gentle, she even considered him a bit weak. How he would always stay by mother's side, and always be a good little one. Fara did have a sister a well, which was more like her, so she got use to hanging around her. As she grew, fighting became something she was very use to, she loved it, and strived to become better at it each day.

Her stubborn attitude, and her will to succeed, made her more determined to set of. She left her parents at the age of ten, when she became more experienced. Fara became accustomed to fighting against other feral Pokemon. There was plenty of quarrels, plenty of hand to hand combat, plenty of action. This life was suitable for Fara, it seemed to be almost made for her even. She was a bit reckless at first, charging at unsuspecting enemies without even wondering if they were stronger then her. Fara soon fixed that as she grew a bit older, and she had went threw fights were she had to actually run before she got seriously hurt. Her focus still lacked a lot, and she often found herself tripping up in a fight she was in. She was known to challenge to weaker, which helped her plenty of times when trying to raise her experience.

Traveling so much really did make her use to not attaching with anyone, only if she was offered a chance at something would she stay at one place for a while. The life as a vagabond was just fine, she was able to find food well. She was use to berries, other foods that would run or hide were something she would dine on if she felt like it, or if she was not satisfied with the sweet taste of berries. And of course she still continues her journey, chapters of her life will become unfolded, and her future self revealed as time skips on.

Apparel:
None

Items:
None

Equipped:
None

Stored:
None

Code words: Talesnottail

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(You seem to have some rather odd issues with grammar, though your spelling in most places is pretty good. I won't make too big a deal of it here, as you do write WELL, just not as much from a technical standpoint. Just note it's something to work on, mmkay? Also, one specific note of something I noticed a few different times: the word is "off". Like, "she set off". "Of" is pronounced "uv", like "child of fire". ;P Heh.)


Please add the Starting Age field back into the profile. This helps us ensure her age is accurately updated each year with minimal calculation.

On the note of age, you understand that 15 years old for a Charmeleon is a very full-grown adult, yes? If you're intending to make her an adolescent- the equivalent of a 15-year-old human- she should probably be more like a year or two; probably a year and a half to get closest to the 15-ish range. :3 This is all completely up to you, however; I'm just telling you so you know~


Padaran refers to pack-dwelling, quadrapedal Pokemon. We are not beyond considering exceptions to the general system as we do believe anything can happen, but I see nothing that would justify this oddity in her as of right now. :3 If you have a compelling reason why she should be Padaran, just let me know; otherwise, please change her to Halian.


As clearly stated in the Special Power topic, that specific ability does NOT need to be added to the list; it's just an understood fact all Fire-types can. ('xD Don't feel bad though, you're not NEARLY the first person to put it on a bio anyway.) No need to take up your precious limited ability space over it. ^^ You might consider adding some of the other Fire-type powers, but it isn't necessary if you just don't want them.


How did her level get so high? How did she get those moves? Please make note of any and all Promos taken for her at the bottom of the bio if you could. :3

She can't very well have a Starshard attack without a Starshard. In case you were confused, Starshards are Items. ^^ Please remove Blast Burn.


For History, my only comment is the age at which she left home. Assuming you keep her at 15 even, leaving home at the age of 10 would be like a human moving out of their parents house when they were like 25, lol. xP It doesn't seem like she was TOO eager, hehe. Of course, if you change her current Age too, you'll need to change this anyway. :3 What it is shouldn't matter too much, just so long as its younger than she currently is of course.


Finally, you seem to have missed a few things in the rules as indicated by your Code. :3 Please re-read:
-- The Acceptable Species post starting after the main list.
-- Rule 4 on Hybrid Rules.
-- The History section of the Field Explanation topic.
^^ Thank you~



Randomly~
:3 I'd like to say, I'm VERY impressed with her Appearance, especially given she's just an average-looking purebred~ Great job with descriptiveness there.

So do I redo history, add how she learned each one of her moves and how she gained each of her levels.

And why do I have to reread the Hybrid rules, I don't really have a hybrid. And do I have the change the species of her since you mentioned to reread the species list?

Just wanted to ask that

No, her species is fine. If you'll read what I actually wrote:

I was trying to be nice and tell you which sections the parts you missed or messed up on were in. '^^

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No. Creation Level is determined by only two things: member rank and reward levels (from promos or contests). This is to ensure things are as fair as possible. If we were to allow historic levels, I will more than guarantee you I could create multiple Lv100 'mon with ease, and if I bothered proof-reading, you wouldn't even find one type-o or inconsistancy in the entire bio. Clearly, however, this wouldn't be fair to less experienced writers, as the character would be undefeatable from the very beginning of its play time. As such, we try to keep everyone on a pretty level field starting out. Once you are approved, however, you can spend as much time as you want battling and leveling, as you will have earned those levels IN the game, not before it. :3

For moves, we will RARELY allow ONE historic move to be added for an exceptional bio as a reward, but this one- while quite good- is not to that standard I'm afraid. Your moves should be determined by Level and rewards (TMs and the like gained via promo or contest) only.

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By the way, the rules did explain Starting Age is IDENTICAL to Age when creating a char. The only reason for the extra field is to make sure we have updated your age properly each year.

-Scrtaches head-

Sorry for the late reply, still trying to make since of what you said. So that means I have to change my history... And whatever you just said...?

Sorry, I'm like 14, and I have no idea what to do. Maybe this is a bit to complicated for me....

Our owner is 12; age shouldn't affect it, heh. Not having experience with this kind of RP can though. :3 And we're happy to take as much time as needed to help you learn and get comfortable with it. ^^ Just tell me EXACTLY what parts you don't get so I know what to better explain.

The 'secret code' is not 'Talesnottail'. :3 Refer to a few posts back, and I listed which sections to reread to figure out what you messed up or missed. ^^

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"Starting Age" should be the same as "Age". The only reason for both is that her Age will change as time passes. Starting Age gives Staff a reference to ensure her Age is right in the future. :3

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You do NOT need to change your history for moves or levels. You need to change the moves and levels themselves. She should be Lv5 with Charmeleon's level-up moves up to Lv5. The only way to get more of either BEFORE she is approved is through contest prizes and promo perks. :3 A list of active contests and promos can be found in the announcement box. ^^

So in other words, without any of those, she'd be Lv5 with moves she would know by level-up until then. If, for example, you got 4 levels and 1 TM from a promo, she'd be Lv9, with any more LvUp moves she'd have now learned, and one TM move. ^^ Get it?

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You DO need to change ONE tiny detail in her history now, though. Her Age says she is 3. The history says she left home at 10. She's not that old yet though, lol. 1 or 2 would be a better number, though you could do like 1 1/2 or 9 months or whatever too. ^^ It just needs to be less than her age now.

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A purebred Charmeleon can't be a Pack-dweller. All Charmeleon walk on their hind legs and have arms. Thus, all Charmeleon in Lunalei are considered tribe material. :3

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Is that all clear enough? If not, just tell me and I'll try to break it down more. ^^

Ugh, yeah, kind of... I guess I need to read the rules all over again then?

Er, maybe I should just make a new character, I'm going to get confused if I change a lot of stuff... I'll just plan a new character and see what I can make.

Edit; And I do have experience with roleplay