Here's a link to my Zelda fan fiction. http://zeruda837.deviantart.com/art/Forbidden-Love-150106459 Now, please keep in mind that this is my first ZeLink fan fiction, so please go easy on me ok? I'm still learning. :D OK enjoy!

This actually a pretty cute fan fic. I thought it was sweet how Zelda was so anxious to reunite with Link, and the stuffed animal gift was adorable.

I think you should try to make sure you work on separating dialogue, though, and try not to switch from 3rd to 1st person- pick one and go with it. Personally, I prefer 3rd. My only other real gripe is attaching Japanese suffixes in an otherwise English fan fiction- it doesn't fit. It's something that you want to try to avoid. And remember, Zelda's pretty close to Link.... and if they're romantically close, she wouldn't really refer to him with "-san" anyway.

Soo... yeah, remember to separate dialogue so the reader isn't confused about who is talking. Other than that, you've got the makings for a great story. :>

Thank you! Well, first off I agree with the Japanese suffix's. Now that you pointed it out I realize it doesn't really fit in, I'll edit my story and go back to my original title of Master for Link.

Sorry if my story confused you in the beginning, I just wanted to give an introduction. Like telling what happened prior to what was going on then. (I hope I'm making sense to you )

One thing I just want to put out there is, that at this point and time in my story Link and Zelda are not romantically involved. I wanted my story to show how their love grows over time, starting from a close friendship to complete commitment. Well, that's all I really have to say for now, thanks for the help! :link: