Lost to Time Review Topic!, Reviews appreciated!

Okay so, THIS is where you can discuss my new sequel, "Lost to Time!" "No Room for Heroes" was really a story to get your feet wet, and this thing will hopefully take you on a wild ride through the BIONICLE universe! SO, your thoughts here! Reviews are greatly appreciated.

Ooh, one more thing! I created a Hazdrix Wiki Page here, on Custom BIONICLE Wiki

This post has been edited by comicboy15 on May 29 2011, 06:08 PM

This is awesome! Just like the story before it.

But one thing you got wrong is how the mask of time works. This is a quote from the wiki:

The Kanohi Vahi contains the Legendary Power of Time. It allows its user to filter this sheer power to speed up or slow down time around a target. The mask cannot, however, be used for time travel.

So you might need to change it.

AUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUGH!
RAGERAGERAGERAGERAGERAGERAGERAGE!

Sorry about that. I'm not mad at you at all. It's just that it took me a long time to come up with how to make them travle through time. Sigh... Well, I guess that I'll have to do another "agori into toa" patch up again. To tell the truth, you caught me off guard when you originally pointed that out, but I worked it into the whole "Hazdrix not being supposed to exist thing." I guess I'll have to come up with something for this too. It's ironic. Whenever I try to write a story, I include something that can't happen in the first chapter. I hope it doesn't become a happen.

This post has been edited by comicboy15 on May 31 2011, 07:18 PM

The way you explained him being an Agori and being able to become a Toa was great and did not seem out of place at all. I'm sure you'll think of something equally as awesome for this. Maybe they could modify the mask?

I think I've come up with something. Do you remember "Time Trap?" When Vakama found the Vahi there was a crack in it. I wonder why?
HINT: Ima use it in my story.

This post has been edited by comicboy15 on May 31 2011, 07:16 PM

You my friend are a genius. DU EEt!

EDIT: Read the latest part. Its getting interesting...

This post has been edited by Toa Yurikk on May 31 2011, 09:58 PM

Thank you, thank you. (dramatic bows.)

Now, I ponder what happens next in my tale!

Okay, it's been a long long time since I posted a chapter in "Lost to Time." BUT, chapter three is up now! (WHOO!) Sorry it's a little short, but I just wanted to establish some things before the adventure REALLY takes off. Enjoy!

Great job. Keep it up.

I read No Room for Heroes and It was real good! I started getting into the sequel and It just as good if not better than the first.
Good Job!

This post has been edited by Letoki on Jun 12 2011, 01:08 AM