I can see why you don't like it, and I agree, it's definitely not your best. It's very confusing and I didn't really get what was going on. It's still beautifully written though, I love your style of writing even though I didn't like the style of the piece much. Wow, I'm being harsh this morning. :lol: I'm sorry. :(
|She could barely see him through the cracks, a massive group of lines resembling a spiders web.|
I love that sentence. There's something very evocative in it.