The Jewel Factor
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Thank-you!  ok people! Guess what! You guessed it! Next chapter! Chapter 4 ~ The london girl
A red echidna comes bursting out of the mall and says, "Ahh...the sweet outdoors! FINALLY! PEACE AT LAST!!!" everyone stops for a moment and looks at her. She puts her hands on her hips and says rudely, "What are you punks looking at, huh?" they turned away and started to walk where they were heading off to. Some were still looking at the rude echidna with mean faces but she didnt care. she just said, "Yeah that's right! You guys better keep moving!" and walked off.
She had a map of the London in her hand. She kept looking at it from time to time trying to figure out where to go next.
"Hmm...take a left at Peako street and go down 2 miles until you see a stop sign..." she mummbled to herself. She rolled up the map, put it in her pocket and heading off for Peako Street.
Once she got there and knocked on the door of 1902 Peako Street she had no answer. By now she was very mad because she went through all that trouble to find that place for nuthin'! She started to head home. Then she heard the door open. She looked back and a piece of paper was all that came out. As it fluttered down to the ground she grabbed it. The piece of paper read...
Go to Queen's Park. There you will find the enemy. You must kill the enemy with all costs. If you don't you don't get your $10000 reward!
She crumbled up the paper and threw it. She then chuckled to herself and said, "Humph. That little cheap skate...I'll get this person yet."
Once there at Queen's park and read the description on the enemy. Then she spotted the culprit. She gave off a slight grin and ran towards the enemy giving 'em a punch in the face.~~~~~~~~~~ How do you like it? I bet you're pretty much wondering who the enemy is huh? Well in the next chapter you'll know.
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Hey, I just read your fanfic and its pretty good. I like the way you do speach, the real way, not in script form.(Script form is cheating!) Its sorta confusing but I think im getting it. From a fellow fanfic writer, keep on writing, you have talent
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No one would have believed in the last years of the Nineteenth century that this world was being watched keenly and closely by intelligences greater than man's and yet as mortal as his own; that as men busied themselves about their various concerns they were scrutinized and studied, perhaps almost as narrowly as a man with a microscope might scrutinize the transient creatures that swarm and multiply in a drop of water. With infinite complacency men went to and fro over this globe about their little affairs, serene in their assurance of their their empire over matter. Yet across the gulf of space, minds that are to our minds as ours are to those of the beasts that perish, intellects vast and cool and unsympathetic, regarded this earth with envious eyes, and slowly and surely drew their plans against us...
~*~H.G. Wells, "War Of The Worlds"~*~
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Sorry for the double post but here's the next part.
Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!" Kacie screamed as she fell and she closed her eyes knowing soon she was going to hit the ground hard. Suddenly the falling stopped. She didn't bother to open her eyes because she was way too scared. She felt herself moving through the air and she opened her eyes. She looked up and saw a brown vixen. It was Sissy! "Sissy?!!"
"Hi!" Sissy said looking down at her smiling.
"Sissy how'd you? What ae you? *sighs* Thanks Sissy."
"hehe. your welcome!" Sissy said as she slowly brought Kacie's feet to the ground and then flew down to the ground herself.
"What are you doing here?" Kacie asked.
"Well, I've always wanted to go to Paris so now...here I am! I was walking through the park when suddenly I saw this purple light race passed me. I was thinking 'huh, that light looked familiar' and I thought it was you. It turns out that I was correct. hehe"
Kacie smiled and then they felt the ground shake underneath them and they saw a huge explosion. They ran towards it. Once they got to it they saw a car that was on fire. They stood there confused and then a smirk appeared on Kacie's face. They heard someone coughing inside the car.
"Oh my gosh! Kacie! There's someone still inside the veichal!"
"Don't worry. I have it under control." she said as she chanted this words, "Wanta Crisom!" her eyes turned dark dark blue and her whole body turned white. she crossed her arms in front of her and closed her eyes. A ring of water formed around the car and a few minutes after wards the car wasn't on fire anymore and Kacie was back to normal.
Sissy stood there with her eyes wide open in amazment and not knowing what to say at all. Kacie walked over to the door, opened it and got the girl out of the car.
"Are you ok?" Kacie asked her.
"*cough cough* yes i'm *cough cough* fine. Thank-you uh...Kacie." the girl said.
"Your welcome."
"I guess you were too smart and fast for me."
"Yes. So, who are you?"
"I'm Terra Heart. I'm a officer and a spy and you are now..." gets out her cuffs and puts them on Kacie's wrist. "under arrest."
"WHAT?!!!" Both Kacie and Sissy scream. "What for?!!"
"You know what for."
"I did not do that! You've got the wrong hedgehog!" Kacie said.
"Well, we have proof that you did do it. So c'mon!!" Terra said leading her to the jail.
Sissy stood there alone with tears in her eyes. Sissy thought to herself, "I've got to help Kacie." and flew off.
*At the jail*
Terra threw Kacie into a jail cell and shut the door.
Kacie stood up and went over to the door, "I'm telling you! You have the wrong person!"
Terra locked the door, looked at Kacie, smiled and then walked off. Kacie slid down to the floor and started to sob.
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