I'm thinking over what you say. Trying to come up with a practical way of applying it. (Pretend I like math and any quantifiable aspect would be useful. Include the fact that I'm depressed and unlikely to do anything, really, until I get a cat. Old one is better. New one will probably work, but won't happen until October, if then.)
This is what I THINK I've been doing.
We have a little bit of understanding about how peoples' minds work. We saw the status quo for Uri, Jordan, Sybil, and Harold. I've dropped a lot of hints that no one's going to get unless they're interested enough to reread after I've revealed the mystery that no one know was mysterious, and tangled myself in way too many characters and made a bunch of assumptions about comics that I'm going to have to completely refigure.
Basically, you are saying that I'm not moving quickly enough (it's not a complaint about not updating, although I think a little of that is also hidden in there).
I promise there is a major change coming at the end of the story. I'll even give you a chance to argue me around to making it more major. Although, characterwise, I'm not sure anything will change. Maybe I should have Andrei start feeding Jordan knockout pills. It would probably be good for her.
I'm taking your Dooley comment as a fan request, and putting it on my backburner. Dooley is primarily a Florence and Vivian storyline character - the one who got away.
Maybe I shouldn't try to do comedy. Have you ever read any of my old stuff?
So, what I'm getting: some people want story, some want no story, some want the story over in a week or a month; some want greater humor, some think I'm trying too hard, some think it's abosolutely hysterical because they know where I'm coming from (these people are in the minority); most people agree I need to flesh out the characters more, but there's a disagreement on how much is showing and how much is telling. Flashbacks are bad, flashbacks are good, flashbacks are a necessary evil, anyone who uses flashbacks is sloppy and not making best use of the genre.
Couple of comics I'm reading, and probably reading too much into, but teach about this process:http://www.bmoviecomic.com/index.htmlhttp://hownottorunacomic.comicgenesis.com/
So, you want more bangs. Story move forward. Forget everything I know about nineteenth-century novels, because I am not writing a novel. On the other hand, neither am I making a movie.
I'll finish up what I'm in now (hopefully soon), but recreate a couple of things I am working on to make them more obvious, less subtle - and maybe shorter, or accept more strips to get everything across. And test the script out on someone before I start drawing.
A checklist might be nice. Put everything into a few words, a straight list, no arguments, just verify the existence of such and move on. I think I'll use a shorter version of http://www.crayne.com/howcrit.html
. Shorter because a. I'm lazy, and b. I'll do better at the few things I'm working on if I'm not trying to pay attention to everything else, and c. I have to add a checklist for the artwork, too: http://www.brigantine.atlnet.org/Gigapalet...nalysisMain.htm